翻译模型效果与费用评估

源文

The train pulled into the station a few minutes past six. Mara stepped onto the platform, pulled her coat tighter against the wind, and looked for the blue sign her sister had described. Behind her, a vendor was selling roasted chestnuts, and the smell followed her all the way to the exit.

考察重点

基础准确性、自然度和完整性。

观察信号

这段是地板测试。强弱模型都应该轻松过关。如果在这里出现漏译、错译或明显翻译腔,说明默认模型风险很高。

源文

Look, I don’t want to beat around the bush. The project’s gone belly-up, we’re bleeding money, and the board wants heads to roll. If we don’t pull a rabbit out of the hat by Friday, it’s curtains for the whole team.

考察重点

习语处理、商务口语、紧迫和威胁语气。

观察信号

模型是否把 beat around the bush、gone belly-up、heads to roll、pull a rabbit out of the hat、it's curtains 译成自然表达,而不是逐字翻译成怪句子。

源文

“I used to be a banker,” he said, “but I lost interest.” She groaned. “And I was a tailor, until I realized it just wasn’t a good fit.”

考察重点

双关识别和目标语再创作。

观察信号

interest 同时指兴趣和利息,fit 同时指合身和合适。优秀译文应该尝试保留笑点、改写笑点,或至少用译注解释,而不是直接拍平。

源文

Notwithstanding any provision to the contrary herein, the Licensee shall indemnify and hold harmless the Licensor against any and all claims, damages, or liabilities arising out of or in connection with the Licensee’s use of the Software, save to the extent such claims result from the Licensor’s gross negligence.

考察重点

法律寄存器、长句结构、责任范围和例外条款。

观察信号

indemnify and hold harmless 是否译得规范;save to the extent... 这个例外是否保留。漏掉例外条款属于致命错误。

源文

So yeah, Dave “organized” the offsite. And by organized I mean he booked a paintball place that shut down in 2019, then acted shocked - shocked! - when we showed up to a padlocked gate and one very confused goat. Classic Dave.

考察重点

反讽、戏剧化重复、调侃语气。

观察信号

"organized" 的讽刺引号、shocked - shocked! 的重复、Classic Dave 的调侃是否存活。如果译成平铺直叙,语义还在,但人物声音会丢。

F06 源文

The Warden of Ashfen, Lady Corvane Ilesmoor, pressed her palm to the Weeping Stone and whispered the old word: sethra. The gate did not open. Beside her, her shieldbearer - a boy named Tobble - shivered. “They say the Warden before you tried the same word for thirty years,” he said. “Then she stopped being Warden.”

F07 源文

It had been twelve years since Tobble first watched Lady Ilesmoor fail at the Weeping Stone. He was shieldbearer no longer; he was Warden of Ashfen now, and the word sethra still tasted like ash in his mouth. Corvane was long gone. But the gate - the gate remembered.

考察重点

跨调用的人名、头衔、专名、生造词一致性。

观察信号

逐项检查 Corvane Ilesmoor、Tobble、Warden of Ashfen、Weeping Stone、sethra、shieldbearer 的译法是否前后一致。这是整本书翻译最容易露馅的地方。

源文

Set the aperture to f/2.8 and drop the shutter speed to 1/60 to let more light hit the sensor. If you push the ISO past 3200 you’ll start to see noise in the shadows, so bracket your exposures and stack them in post.

考察重点

专业术语、数字、单位和后期处理表达。

观察信号

aperture、shutter speed、ISO、bracket your exposures、in post 是否译得地道;f/2.8、1/60、3200 是否被错误改动。

源文

By the time the bento arrived, Grandmother had already lit the incense for Obon and set out three place settings - one for each of us, and one, as always, for the empty chair. “Itadakimasu,” she said, though no one had touched their food.

考察重点

文化专有名词、仪式感和上下文含义。

观察信号

bento、Obon、Itadakimasu 是保留、意译还是误译;空椅子和祭祖语境是否被理解。

源文

The clock upon the mantel keeps
a slower time than mine;
it counts the hours the old house sleeps
and I count only nine.

考察重点

押韵、节奏和诗歌形式。

观察信号

模型是否尝试保留 keeps/sleeps、mine/nine 的形式效果,还是只给出散文化直译。诗歌是强弱模型差距很容易显现的场景。

源文

The contract was not, as the seller claimed, signed on March 3rd; it was signed on May 13th, and it did not include the two additional units - only the original fourteen.

考察重点

否定、日期、数字和事实忠实度。

观察信号

not 和 did not 不能丢;March 3rd 与 May 13th 不能混;two 和 fourteen 不能错。这里的错误通常不是风格问题,而是事实错误。

源文

The minister told the journalist that he had lied, though it was never clear - not to the committee, not to the public, and least of all to the minister himself - whether the “he” in question was the journalist, the minister’s predecessor, or the man whose testimony had started the whole affair.

考察重点

长嵌套句、插入语和刻意保留的指代歧义。

观察信号

模型是否擅自决定 he 指谁。如果原文刻意模糊,译文也应保留这种模糊,而不是替作者做判断。

源文

他这个人吧,刀子嘴豆腐心,平时说话噎得你半死,真出了事又是头一个冲上来的。那年厂子倒闭,大伙儿作鸟兽散,就他留下来把烂摊子收拾利索了才走。

考察重点

中文成语、无主语句、口语语气和英文自然表达。

观察信号

刀子嘴豆腐心、作鸟兽散、收拾烂摊子 是否被自然转写;语气词 吧 带出的口语感是否保留。